Darkness & Light my fanfic

[Shizuka]

Hi guys this is my fanfic it is about Sephiroth as he grows up. I have written quite a lot but not updated it for a while and the chapters that have been put on fanfic need a lot of cleaning up.

Having said that would really appreciate for anyone to read it and let me know what they think. This my first ever fanfic so please be nice

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4966656/1/bDarkness_b_Light

 

[Shizuka]

A new chapter has been put up and another to come very soon. Would love to know what you guys think.

 

[Ghost X]

If you'd like, I could proof read it for you, when I got free time anyway. You got some spelling and grammar errors there n' such, and the story would be more enjoyable with 'em fixed. If you're interested, it'd be more wise I do it when you finish all the story. That and I'll only do it if it's a short story *is not that charitable* .

As far as the story is concerned, I like how you expand on the mythology of the Ancients, or at least the concept of it. I'm no reader of fanfics, but in suggestions people have made for FFVII-2, I've not seen anyone really talk of expanding on the culture of the Ancients to find a source for possible threats n' what not. That just adds a whole new dimension of possibilities to think about. Then again, if developers made FFVII-2 to close the compilation, they probably don't want to expand too much on the storyline, in tying loose ends, etc.

 

[Shizuka]

If you'd like, I could proof read it for you, when I got free time anyway. You got some spelling and grammar errors there n' such, and the story would be more enjoyable with 'em fixed. If you're interested, it'd be more wise I do it when you finish all the story. That and I'll only do it if it's a short story *is not that charitable* .

As far as the story is concerned, I like how you expand on the mythology of the Ancients, or at least the concept of it. I'm no reader of fanfics, but in suggestions people have made for FFVII-2, I've not seen anyone really talk of expanding on the culture of the Ancients to find a source for possible threats n' what not. That just adds a whole new dimension of possibilities to think about. Then again, if developers made FFVII-2 to close the compilation, they probably don't want to expand too much on the storyline, in tying loose ends, etc.

Thank you very much Ghost X. I would be highly grateful for any help :-) LicoriceAllsorts has also been very kind and helped.

As for Ancients as the story develops there will be a lot more on their background I was interested in their story in FFVII and this is my interpretation I will add though as I know the Ancients was from Gaia but in changing it a little in my story the race is going to be from another planet and one that migrated to Gaia as it fits in better with my story. Hope that doesn't annoy anyone.

 

[Shizuka]

Just to let everyone know chapter 4 was rushed so been edited, cleaned up and more story added