hmmm im not sure. I think you were testing your mic.
If you want, you could do a couple of extra takes of a few of Dynes lines. You mispronounced Marlene's name.
I think you pronounced it Marlin. Also, one of the last lines was a bit choppy.
"When I was trying to destroy everything, I was going to take Marlene with me here too."
"And I've already entrusted Marlene to Barret. "
"I reek of the blood of those I killed with my bare hands right to the very depths of my soul."
"After dying and experiencing all that, I can finally stop turning my back against Barret and Marlene. Let me say my thanks..."
I think thats all. If you cant get it done over the weekend, I'll just work with what i have